I feel so disconnected
old friends are far
new friends are new
I feel so disconnect
I'm nobody
and who are you
I feel so discon
give me that
watch me do
I feel so dis
what luck
damn blue
I feel so
alert:
untrue
I feel
through
I
grew
I feel
a third
debut
I feel so
what I
now knew
I feel so dis
traced myself
how you drew
I feel so discon
faultless in pain
greenvelvet hue
I feel so disconnect
ready to test
paradigm view
I feel so disconnected.
Tuesday, November 24, 2009
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Blogs are so clear these days
Blogs are so sad these days
I like the shape.
Amen, I feel it too...
thanks y'all. Ari I linked you as a muse; hope you don't mind.
two diamantes interwoven... one collapse/expansion of odd syllables vs another of even couplets-
slight asymmetry... makes it better-
7(Math.floor((2*4))/2)
6(Math.floor((2*4))/2)
5(Math.floor((2*3))/2)
4(Math.floor((2*2))/2)
3(Math.floor((2*1))/2)
2(Math.ciel((1*1))/2)
1(Math.ciel((1*1))/2)
2(Math.floor((2*1))/2) !=
3(Math.floor((2*1))/2)
4(Math.floor((2*2))/2)
5(Math.floor((2*3))/2)
6(Math.floor((2*4))/2)
7(Math.floor((2*4))/2)
that harmonic makes it less certain, nice.
wonder who wrote this
haha! I thank you for paying attention to the syllables. They really are an easy way out when you don't have any creative ideas for alternative configuration.
I know how you feel about asymmetry...
I guess I would be afraid of it looking lazy if I messed with one of the lines. The alternative is looking too anal about having it be perfect. So anally lazy. But yeah, given the subject of dis connectivity, I guess being adamant about symmetry is counterintuitive. If I made one of the lines a ridiculous amt of syllables, that might temper the perception of laziness tho...
If you want to write any more programs for engineering poetry, feel free to share. I'll transpose them into the linguistic sphere.
thanks. ;)
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